[fic] Superficial Dreams

[aimeeshii]

Title: Superficial Dreams.
Summary: When one runs out of tricks to play, a whole new level of mischief has to be created.
Rating: PG-13.
Word Count: 2916.
Pairing: Mukuro Rokudo/Chrome Dokuro, Kyouya Hibari/Chrome Dokuro.
Prompt: Chrome, Kyouya, Mukuro-“public embarrassment”
AN: This was a last minute one-shot, based around a small idea I've had for

Comments

[xsayounara]

THIS IS SEXAY. HOT. BRAVO. This is really good. I want more.

[aimeeshii]

You will never get more. Ever. :'D

[xsayounara]

I WILL. SOMEHOW.

[aimeeshii]

Pfft! I'd like to see you try. Are you gonna steal my bears and hump me more?

[bluequartz]

Yay, you finished! Mukuro is so deliciously devious in how he decided to toy with Chrome by pretending he forgot everything, about her and Hibari.

I thought Chrome to be so adorable in that she would come up with excuses to see Hibari and of course her genuine concern for Mukuro and his lost memories especially since the touchy-feely new him was upseting her a little bit.

Heart, heart the ending so much with Mukuro and Chrome's inner discussion with Chrome blurting out bits of what was going on inside her head, then running away.

Awesome job Aimee, good luck in the contest!

[aimeeshii]

I thought it was really out of character for him, but ah well. It kind of works, I guess? :'D

I'm glad you understood that bit! I was worried about their interaction, too, since I don't particularly know their characters well. Only recently I've been writing Chrome. (About three times, I think?)

Pfft, thank you for even reading this, Blue! It means a lot.

You too! I'm cheering for your entry.

Yui here. Too lazy to sign on

[anonymous]

Oh, Mukuro. Why are you such a jerk. Were you really that bored? ;A;

Anywho. Enjoyed story. SO GLAD IT WAS INNOCENT NOMNOMNOM. The ending was amusing. Oh, Mukuro. Stop being sch a jerk.

Re: Yui here. Too lazy to sign on

[aimeeshii]

Lazy shit, get out. LOL, I kid. Maybe.

Innocent unlike yours. I can't wait to read it. (:

[infinitymax]

I want 6918. /shot

BUT I LOVED THIS. My OT3~*~*~* <3

[aimeeshii]

You want 6918? Well then, my love, go right here!

Thank you muchly, my love, it means a lot! <3

[infinitymax]

I WILL READ IT IN ONE SITTING.

MOST LIKELY. /rushes off~*~*~*

[aimeeshii]

Good luck! Apparently, it's really creepy LOL.

//cheers for you

[100paperfans]

Niiiiice!

Character Interpretation - 10 for Mukuro! That seems like something he would pull for the sake of being a bastard. 10 for Chrome, too. Her reaction to his memory loss and her interaction with Hibari just made me automatically think of her as docile and yet unyielding. Aaaand 10 for Hibari too, because his reactions seemed in-character for the most part to me.
Grammar/Spelling - 8, a few mistakes here and there, but we all have those~
Story Flow - 18. I think the flow of this was good and nicely paced. Not too slow and not too fast. And please ignore the dirty inclinations of that phrases, haha.
Prompt Usage - 10, but only because it wasn't a very 'public' humiliation as opposed to a private one.
Originality - 13. I haven't seen a fic involving Mukuro faking memory loss as far as I remember. Good job!
Bonus - Glad you could include the bonus, and thank you a lot for participating, Aimee!

[aimeeshii]

Oh, thank you for taking your time to use the point system. I need to go through and read the other entries soon, too. (:

So much love for you, Kitsune! Yeah, it does seem more private, rather than public, since I changed it last minute. Originally Tsuna and others were gonna stumble in, Kyouya yawning again causing a boner. Oh yes, I really was considering the boner from yawning idea for the prompt, stop judging.

Thank you for reading this! -hearts you-