And scribbling...
the Query Letter of Doom continues apace.
I have completely dumped the chess metaphor. Rather than a "pawn," Ben is now a "wild card," which in theory gives him more agency (because words Mean Things and have Connotations). Rather than just getting shoved around a board, he's a spanner in the works, mucking things up. This is far more accurate in light of what actually happens in the book.
Of course, this is me we're talking about here, so the poker metaphor also gets beaten to a bloody and submissive pulp. I'm not sure if this is a good thing or a bad thing. It may be too twee for an agent, or it may hit them just right. Hell, I don't know.
I'm to the point where I'm second-guessing myself. This will be quickly followed by me saying "Screw it, it is what it is, *I* like it, dammit, and if an agent doesn't like it, then that person is not the agent for me."
*wonders if I should post this for the Usual Suspects*
EDIT: I've sent it to the Query Shark; we'll see what she says. *wibbles*
I have completely dumped the chess metaphor. Rather than a "pawn," Ben is now a "wild card," which in theory gives him more agency (because words Mean Things and have Connotations). Rather than just getting shoved around a board, he's a spanner in the works, mucking things up. This is far more accurate in light of what actually happens in the book.
Of course, this is me we're talking about here, so the poker metaphor also gets beaten to a bloody and submissive pulp. I'm not sure if this is a good thing or a bad thing. It may be too twee for an agent, or it may hit them just right. Hell, I don't know.
I'm to the point where I'm second-guessing myself. This will be quickly followed by me saying "Screw it, it is what it is, *I* like it, dammit, and if an agent doesn't like it, then that person is not the agent for me."
*wonders if I should post this for the Usual Suspects*
EDIT: I've sent it to the Query Shark; we'll see what she says. *wibbles*