I've replaced the
problematic 150-word paragraph with 450 words that suck less. These words give us more of a sense of the previous relationship they had and a hint of the future one.
And thus my notion that I do most of my best writing after ten PM is reinforced. :/ This is a problem when I'm married to a man who likes to go to bed around eleven. But it's like I finally relax enough to do it or something around then, even if I've had the house to myself for most of the day.
Yeah. I don't know.