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Leon/The Professional AU (Part 2/4)

Jul 31, 2011 17:48

Title: No One Has a Photo of This Man (changed from The Fallen Man because I kinda hated that title)
Author: sneaqui
Artist: heavenly_rain
Team: ANGST
Prompt: innocence, home, overwhelmed
Word Count: 3200
Rated: R
Warnings: graphic-ish depictions of murder, death of a child, mentions of drug use

Summary: Arthur is a hitman. Eames is the teenage boy that lives down the hall ( Read more... )

team angst, prompt: home, prompt: overwhelmed, fanfic, prompt: innocence, wip

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ladderax August 3 2011, 00:48:10 UTC

So, as you know, I think this is incredible. Your prose style is just--amazing. There's nothing wasted; everything is vivid and revealing of character. You are totally a master of "show don't tell", and you're honestly like one of my prose role models. Like Eames' stepfather--you make him totally loathsome with just a few lines of dialogue.

I love the scene with Arthur in the observatory: "He walks up and away from wide, car-clogged avenues and manicured lawns; through sparse, brightly-lit forests of eucalyptus and jacaranda; until there’s nothing but dry scrub and wildflowers clinging to the sides of an every narrowing dirt path. Until the earth begins to fall away beside him and into the canyon." This just took my breath away. This whole scene, really, did.

And Arthur's moral dilemma--open or not? And then what happens because of it. Everything is just so tightly connected, everything has *consequences*. And because of the way you created Talula and Eames' mom and even the stepfather, because they were so human, I felt totally gutted when they died. And I can't wait to see what comes of the budding and believably awkward relationship between Arthur and Eames. (I've already squeed at you about the sexiness of what they notice about each other like a billion times, so I'll spare you all that. But. Yes.)

THE MAGIC CONTINUES.

solitudeinherk August 3 2011, 12:36:04 UTC

C-can I just copypaste this comment? Can't say it any better.

sneaqui August 4 2011, 01:35:33 UTC

Copypaste-ing is totally allowed 'round these parts :)

Thank you for reading and commenting!

sneaqui August 4 2011, 01:34:46 UTC

ANJFK;DNJVFDK;V!!! YOUR COMMENTS HAVE REDUCED ME TO A QUIVERING PILE OF GOO!! All these words mean so much to me, bb... I can't even...

Your comments are always so thoughtful, and they help me figure out what I'm doing right and what I still need to work on.

THANK YOU, BABY!! *squeezes you*

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