Could I ask a question of the experienced writers out there? Someone just complained that my 'love parts are similar.' I'm not sure if she meant the physical descriptions or the emotional dynamic
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Love and fight scenes are the hardest IMHO....you can have too much detail or too little and you can never please everybody.
You have in your earlier stories used similar descriptive words (whiting out brain if memory serves) but it was not a distraction in the least, at least not to me. I only noticed because I was devouring your stories one right after another (and I have reread them all and copied them to my hard disc too BTW) so I wouldn't complain. Your later stories have used more varied descriptors and that is normal for a writer...you feel more comfortable and confident writing the scenes. YAY you.
Advice?? Keep writing and if you find yourself using the same words or something maybe try a substitute word or some such. I really don't see that you need to do any real style change. If someone read just one of your stories then not another for a while they wouldn't have even snapped to any "repeat". Besides, there are only so many ways some things can be done and we all have our own way of "thinking" of our reactions to those acts. If you ever have watched porn you'd see that it is majorly repetitiveand not nearly as entertaining LOL.
Hope that helps a bit. I have trouble with love scenes and fight scenes myself.
RepetitionadreamweaverSeptember 8 2008, 17:56:15 UTC
Oh, thank you, Kathleen! My first two stories were written almost at the same time and I used the same words without thinking. When I realized what I was doing and that I'd be writing more stories, I did get more comfortable with the scenes and started trying to vary them.
You're right. "Thinking" of your own responses does influence the description. That's why I was so worried - because I can't change the way I think or feel, and I can only write Spike and Buffy satisfactorily for myself through their visceral internal reactions, which are of course my own. I can't do "camera angle" third-party, staying outside their heads. That becomes "watching" rather that "feeling" or "being" and that's not enough for me. So I didn't know how to change it and completely lost confidence, especially when this was the second time this person had mentioned "freshening up my work".
I'm so glad you think the stories good enough to keep and that you're not bored with them! It's given me the confidence to disregard her opinion and go on writing Spuffy. Thank you! Jo
Love and fight scenes are the hardest IMHO....you can have too much detail or too little and you can never please everybody.
You have in your earlier stories used similar descriptive words (whiting out brain if memory serves) but it was not a distraction in the least, at least not to me. I only noticed because I was devouring your stories one right after another (and I have reread them all and copied them to my hard disc too BTW) so I wouldn't complain. Your later stories have used more varied descriptors and that is normal for a writer...you feel more comfortable and confident writing the scenes. YAY you.
Advice?? Keep writing and if you find yourself using the same words or something maybe try a substitute word or some such. I really don't see that you need to do any real style change. If someone read just one of your stories then not another for a while they wouldn't have even snapped to any "repeat". Besides, there are only so many ways some things can be done and we all have our own way of "thinking" of our reactions to those acts. If you ever have watched porn you'd see that it is majorly repetitiveand not nearly as entertaining LOL.
Hope that helps a bit. I have trouble with love scenes and fight scenes myself.
Kathleen
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You're right. "Thinking" of your own responses does influence the description. That's why I was so worried - because I can't change the way I think or feel, and I can only write Spike and Buffy satisfactorily for myself through their visceral internal reactions, which are of course my own. I can't do "camera angle" third-party, staying outside their heads. That becomes "watching" rather that "feeling" or "being" and that's not enough for me. So I didn't know how to change it and completely lost confidence, especially when this was the second time this person had mentioned "freshening up my work".
I'm so glad you think the stories good enough to keep and that you're not bored with them! It's given me the confidence to disregard her opinion and go on writing Spuffy. Thank you!
Jo
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