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an_ardent_rain in acidandink

"Awareness." Chapter 2.

Feb 14, 2009 19:30

Story: Awareness
Chapter: Notice Me (2/3)
Character(s)/Pairing: Rayne
Written For: Valentine's Day Fic Exchange, for alsunwunderland
Prompt: "It's a great day to be alive"
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2123
Disclaimer: Not mine.
-Author's Notes: Blahr. I hope you can excuse the suck - this is just a bridge to chapter three. Which, if at all possible, will be ( Read more... )

character: malcolm reynolds, genre: pre-romance, character: simon tam, character: zoe washburne, genre: drama, fandom: firefly, pairing: river/jayne, character: river tam, character: jayne cobb, rating: pg-13, fic: awareness, length: 1000-2500 words

Comments 14

willow_reece February 15 2009, 01:37:14 UTC

Hee. Very smooth Jayne. Loved it. ♥

an_ardent_rain February 15 2009, 06:09:46 UTC

Thanks so much! Hee. Glad you liked it. ^^

sunshineali February 15 2009, 03:21:15 UTC

The last line is freaking priceless and so Jayne. It made me giggle. Now the dog is looking at me oddly. Can't wait for more of this. You and your evil cliff hangers.....

an_ardent_rain February 15 2009, 06:10:52 UTC

*laughs* Hee. Thanks so much! Glad you liked the last line. I did, too - very amusing, I thought. Ooh, you're right, I am evil. Heh. ^_^ But the third chapter is up, so at least I didn't make the wait long! Heh.

Anyway, thanks again for the comment!

gilove2dance February 15 2009, 04:02:40 UTC

*waves self* Hotness!!!!!! Moremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremo more!!! Hehe

an_ardent_rain February 15 2009, 06:11:38 UTC

Phwee - thanks so much! *laughs* Oh, never fear - chapter three is up right this very second. So there's more whenever you wish to read it! Hee.

Thanks again - glad you're enjoyed the fic. ^^

Chp. 2 alsunwunderland February 15 2009, 06:49:03 UTC

This is a fabulous "bridge!" Fantastic Jayne: "Well, River, I noticed. What the f!ck ya want from me now?" I think a f!ck is exactly what she wants from him now! TOT: I'm running late with my my gift fic, but I'll be posting it later tonight or today, depending on what time you read this. :)

Re: Chp. 2 an_ardent_rain February 15 2009, 15:02:39 UTC

Hee. I'm so glad you liked it! ^^ Yup - I could just hear Jayne saying that. Thanks so much for the comment!

Sweet! Looking forward to reading whatever you've come up with!

idyllictorture February 15 2009, 06:23:43 UTC

Very nice work. :D I enjoyed River avoiding and ignoring him. That doesn't happen too often in Rayne fic and it was interesting to see. And Mal and Simon showing concern about their relationship. That just made me laugh. I don't know why. And the descriptions of Jayne's masculinity, River trying to get his attention, and his fantasies, very yummy.

an_ardent_rain February 15 2009, 15:05:30 UTC

Thanks so much! ^^

I'm glad you liked the River ignoring him; I can really see her trying to wait for her feelings to go away. Heh. And I love Mal and Simon interfering - those two just amuse me. Anyway, I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter. Thanks again!

evelynvaughn01 February 18 2009, 09:28:29 UTC

Ooh, I'm loving this one too! My favorite line is the last one: "Well, River, I noticed. What the fuck d'ya want from me now?" That sounds SO Jayne. Her awareness of him, while they were hiding, was really delicious, too. I'm looking forward to more!

an_ardent_rain February 19 2009, 06:11:32 UTC

Thank you so much for the comment! :D

Glad you like the fic! Heh. Oh yeah, I totally heard Jayne when I wrote that line, and it was just too good not to put in.