"Wild Stallions." One Shot. Rated: R.

[an_ardent_rain]

Title: Wild Stallions
Character(s)/Pairing: Mal/Jayne
Prompt: SLASH!!! Jayne/Anyone - preferrably Jayne/Mal or Jayne/Wash. Also a fan of Jayne/Zoe (probably the only het pairing I am a fan of). Romance, humour, smut, fluff... just no major angst.
Written For: ru_salki99, for the 2008 serenity_santa exchange.
Rating: R
Set: pre-"Serenity" (the pilot)
Word Count: 1971

Comments

[ishouldntreally]

AH angry Jayne.....how can you go wrong :) Love it!

[an_ardent_rain]

Thank you for the comment! ^^

Heh - oh, I totally agree. Angry!Jayne is deliciously awesome.

Thanks again!

Concrit/Feedback: Wild Stallions

[alsunwunderland]

Concrit: "Mal grit his teeth" I think it should be Mal gritted his teeth, or ground his teeth.

Feedback: I normally don't read/write csi, non-con or slash, but I enjoy your writing so here I am. IMHO, the fight scene was well-written, the characters voices were true. I can hear Jayne saying: “Sly? Aww, hell no, I’ll f!ck anything.” I can see Mal & Jayne fighting for the Alpha spot. Hmmm, plot bunny hopping by.

Re: Concrit/Feedback: Wild Stallions

[an_ardent_rain]

Thank you very much for braving through the slash for me!

Concrit: "Mal grit his teeth" I think it should be Mal gritted his teeth, or ground his teeth.

-Ahh! Thank you. That's one of those I'm never really sure about; and I don't like how "gritted" sounds, so I usual just tell myself "grit" is in the past tense. Heh. I'll change it to ground! I didn't even think of that. Thanks again!

And I am very glad they were in character; these two don't scream "couple" to me, so I decided to make 'em fight. Heh. Ooh, I dangle a carrot in front of that bunny. Hee.

Thanks again!

[ru_salki99]

this was inspired a lot by the Jack/John fight in the episode (2x01) "Kiss Kiss, Bang Bang" - That got me sooooo excited. I actually made the same 'oooooh' face that Ianto's making.

And I tell you what, you didn't disappoint. I loved it and it was a fantastic first Mal/Jayne. Their characterisation was perfect and there is so much potential in it. But alas. I shall go bounce off now to add it to my memories. Thank you. It was an awesome gift.

[an_ardent_rain]

Hee. *beam* Oh, I'm so glad you liked it! :D

Yeah, I was wondering how to start and I was watching that episode and I thought "Oh yes."

I'm so glad that I handled it well! I usually feel like I have Jayne down well, but Mal is almost always a challenge. I thought this really antagonistic feel would help, and it did.

So glad you liked it; you are very, very welcome. ^^

[an_ardent_rain]

Heh - thanks for the comment! :)

I know what you mean; it's a certain type of Mal/Jayne fic that'll catch my interest. I really don't get Mal/Jayne fluff - it makes very little sense to me. I've read some very good pieces that were kinda fluffy, but always like the "rawr!angry!fighting" pieces better. Heh.

*laughs* Oh, awesome response. Heh.

I'm glad you liked it. Hee. Ooh, YES. I know what you mean; love Mal, but he just needs a good "seein' to" sometimes. ^^

Hee. I'm all flattered. Thanks again!

[willow_reece]

Hee. That was awesome & I don't even like Mal/Jayne that much, but this was ruttin' cool. Both boys were written very well & I loved this; "Y'think I'm pretty? Well don't that beat all. I always thought I was the - " He grunted as Jayne elbowed the back of his head. "Mmph. Dashing, handsome type myself, but hell... If you say I'm pretty..." Such a Mal thing to say. Hee.

(Loved the little Wash/Jayne snippet too. Completely in character for both of them & now I have the sudden urge to write a Jayne/Wash/River playing with dinosaurs fic. ♥)

[an_ardent_rain]

Hee. Thank you for the comment! Heh - I was actually particularly proud of that line; I really heard Mal when I wrote it. And that's rare - Mal is wily and I have trouble getting him just right. Heh. And yeah - Mal/Jayne isn't my first choice, either; I like fics like this with them, but I'm not crazy about Mal/Jayne fluff.

Hee. Glad you liked the drabble, too! Ooh, that would be adorable. I shamelessly encourage that. Heh. :)

[goldenwing25]

Angry Jayne rocks but the dinosaurs where just made of AWESOME!

[an_ardent_rain]

Thanks for the comment!

Ahh, yes. Angry!Jayne. Hee. And I'm glad you liked the dinosaurs! That's such a fun element about Wash to work with. ^^

Anyway, thanks again.