Fic - Notes in the Margins (Donna/Harvey) pg, 1/1
Title: Notes in the Margins
Summary: Five times Harvey and Donna touch.
Rating: pg
Author's Notes: 5,036 words. General series spoilers. Written in part for phrenitis because she indulges me, and this whole thing stemmed from a long conversation about why it is these two actively do not touch each other. That's just how we roll. All mistakes are mine. These ( Read more... )
Summary: Five times Harvey and Donna touch.
Rating: pg
Author's Notes: 5,036 words. General series spoilers. Written in part for phrenitis because she indulges me, and this whole thing stemmed from a long conversation about why it is these two actively do not touch each other. That's just how we roll. All mistakes are mine. These ( Read more... )
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The progression here just works so well, each moment bleeding into the next in subtle yet profound ways. The contrast of her unraveling when it comes to her dad against his was especially strong.
Even more, the feeling of their connectedness - of how 'all in' they really are - is bright and warm here.
She has missed him, missed her best friend, and she didn’t realize how much she needed him until he was here, standing in her parent’s kitchen with the mud from the driveway dirtying his perfect shoes.
Love the level of detail here. It's enough that she has missed him, but that she's noticing the little things like the mud on his shoes makes it that much more powerful.
Harvey knows what she’s doing before she even does it - knows she goads him into arguments just to keep him from retreating too far into himself, and he is so profoundly thankful for her in ways he can’t even begin to articulate properlyNot only is this articulated wonderfully, but it's a great ( ... )
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I just want these two idiots to get it together. Is that so much to ask for? lol
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Nooo, of course not. Maybe if we all put it on our holiday lists....
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I've been meaning to ask: have you been watching The Good Wife?
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LOL.
So what I basically said last night:
I LOVE THIS.
The first and last scene particularly left lasting impressions on me.
The first scene reminds me of the scene between Ben Afflack and Jennifer Aniston's characters in He's Just Not That Into You where her father had a heart attack and she was the one taking care of him while her sisters and their stupid husbands were basically inadequate. Who walks in? Ben Afflack's character who basically up until this point, was all for commitment except for marriage. I think your scene played so much better simply because of the added nuances of the inner dialogue that's going on. You really do have a way with the quiet and mental moments. So good ( ... )
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Now that you mention the parallels between that first scene and He's Just Not that Into You I totally see it! Which isn't at all surprising because that was one of my most favorite scenes of that movie, the way he just sort of shows up, and what that means.
True story: I had a sixth section, but it was set in the future, with them together, and it didn't really fit? I mean, the last section was actually the hardest to write because it is them actively toeing that line whereas I think before it has them doing it in more of a subconscious way because they don't quite realize what they feel for each other yet, and I really wanted it to line up with where I hope we are in the show sometime soon. So, I am super excited that you liked it.
One thing to ask you (non-related): How attached are you to your mistletoe prompt that you asked for? I am writing you Christmas fic, but it doesn't really involve ( ... )
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I liked the scene in the movie because of how he just did everything she was stressing about for her father. I mean, the sense of relief that he brought her? It totally matches the sense of relief that you gave Donna when Harvey just showed up and how the house quieted down. It all works. I don't believe you were using that scene as inspiration, but it's kind of funny how the parallels have fit in, ya know?
Yeah, you're right - that sixth section wouldn't have worked. While selfishly, I would have LOVED that, it might have rung a little false, considering our head canon is much more nuanced and ahead of the show! CATCH UP SHOW, WILL YOU? lol.
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Thank you so much for reading!
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BEAR WITH ME AS I TRY TO FORMULATE COHERENT ENOUGH WORDS.
But oh, this is so so so great. I've been so excited to see what you created out of talking about them and their not-touching, carefully crafted. And this is so far beyond what I could have imagined, you just nail it all so perfectly. I love the one with him and her and her family, and then counter to the one dealing with his father's house. That's just gorgeous writing there.
and the end! you leave us with a "now" that is so evocative.
BASICALLY NEVER STOP WITH YOUR FLAWLESSNESS.
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Plus, my fall break is this weekend, so I'm hoping to carve out some time to relax and play but writing!
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They were all lovely, but I especially loved this- Sometimes, Donna wishes more people knew him then, but then she realizes she likes the surge of possessiveness, the quick coil of heat she gets in the pit of her stomach when she remembers she is one of the few, the rare that knew him when. It rings so true of them, of her, to me.
Thank you, thank you! Keep indulging each other, we are all benefiting.
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Thank you so much for reading! I am glad that you liked this - and don't worry, there is definitely more. These two and their stupid faces are all I seem to want to write right now.
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Their stupid faces are all I seem to want to read right now, good match.
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