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That Kiss, for prompt no. 6: not too hot

Sep 10, 2011 13:50

Well, not quite back to earth after the wonderfulness that was D*C, I couldn't resist choosing this moment... Let's just say I did some research. As a writer should ( Read more... )

prompt no 6: not too hot, by kaliclara

Comments 15

bugsfic September 10 2011, 19:13:03 UTC

As it happens, I've been thinking about that kiss for a fic of my own, wondering what she thought, what her smile meant, what she carried away.

I love this little vision and will bear it in mind!

Now, as for the research...Well, every artist must make sacrifices for her art. :D

kaliclara September 10 2011, 19:18:18 UTC

Thank you for your comment! Their first kiss has always been one of my favourite moments, so I was more than happy to do the research...

And from my own experience, I can say this: afterwards, the smile just happens. *sighs again*

nixmom September 10 2011, 19:50:56 UTC

Rub it in some more you hussy! Taking all the BSG men for your own. I think even my Hogan had eyes for you!

kaliclara September 10 2011, 21:38:37 UTC

Oh no no, the Hogan is surely yours. But I'll help you... practicing with that tape.

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nixmom September 10 2011, 19:51:57 UTC

What a lovely little look at this moment. I liked this line the best.
It distracts her now, and now and now,

Just like you huh?
Well done

kaliclara September 10 2011, 21:41:34 UTC

Thank you! I like that repetition too - but it happened because I decided to try for a 200-word drabble and needed more words. Sometimes more is more!

And yes, just a little... My colleagues are being very patient with me. For now.

akachankami September 10 2011, 20:42:20 UTC

(*-*) ♥ ♥ ♥
It distracts her now, and now and now *shippy sigh* love ♥

kaliclara September 10 2011, 21:43:12 UTC

Oh yes... *distracted shippy sigh*

Thanks so much for commenting!

k_d_456_345_a September 11 2011, 00:58:57 UTC

Ah-ha! Great to see this here. I seriously didn't catch that it was Laura's POV until the chamalla reference. Since it came up in my flist stream, I thought it was your D*C report! Wow, you are now-what?-one degree of separation from my favorite scene ever?!

This so well written. I particularly like: "But this she carries still: where his lips touched her, a slowly spreading smile."

kaliclara September 11 2011, 16:41:19 UTC

Thank you! I'm just glad this prompt came up when it did... made me sit down and do something with that lovely moment. Of course Laura gets to kiss him some more...

bsg_aussiegirl September 12 2011, 06:59:49 UTC

For some reason, even though it's all romantic and sweet, this part touched me: a bright memory flashing again and again like sheet lightening through the weariness, the pain, the haze of chamalla.

I'm not sure if it's hot (hee), but it's definitely lovely, with a little sadness intermingled.

Thanks for writing!

kaliclara September 26 2011, 03:24:19 UTC

Thanks so much for commenting! Sorry not to acknowledge sooner... RL crazy these last weeks. You're right - it doesn't really pass the hotness test, but was what needed to be written at that point.

Thanks again!