Obligtory Crit Post~

[abluechild]

How am I doing with Aoko thus far?

Complaints? Compliments? Sandwiches? Comment here and they will be looked at~

Comments

[shoumen_dare]

*gives sandwich*

[discomagic]

First, I don’t really know the canon that your character comes from, but I did read her personality and from the bits that she does talk about in the game. To me, a lot of her responses to things do not seem very logical. She is the daughter of a police officer and supposedly very independent, but she comes off as really inept. Like the blood on her ceiling, why did she not just move to another room - maybe in with Yoh - instead of try to clean something, during the week of arm possession? It seems like that would be the most logical course of action rather than do a task which she had been warned would end in her being injured

[abluechild]

I can actually see where you're coming from, so first, thank you for bringing this to my attention. Magic Kaito is a very short manga series and Aoko, though she is the canon love interest of the main character really isn't in it so much