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abelard369

FIC: Drowning in Friendship K/L (T)

Feb 21, 2006 23:04

Title: Drowning in Friendship
Author: abelard
Rating: T
Spoilers: through Captain's Hand
Pairing: Apollo/Starbuck
Disclaimers: Not mine.
Summary: They're just friends. They'll always be. Just. Friends.

( Drowning in Friendship )

fic, bsg

Comments 23

serendipityxxi February 22 2006, 06:20:38 UTC

Wow, a little rough around the edges, some awkward phrases (like that makes him want to strike her., I'd replace strike with 'hit' here, as strike is too formal a word for Lee's informal thoughts) and then others are just so simple they hit you like a fist in the gut!

the line marked No More Than This,
And neither of them is strong enough to stop themselves from remaining committed to the same useless battle plan as always.

Are 2 examples of what I'm talking about :) Really good :)

abelard369 February 22 2006, 06:23:34 UTC

Thanks so much for your feedback! I think of Lee as sort of helplessly formal even in his thoughts, but that's just me :).

Great Story serendipityxxi February 22 2006, 06:52:30 UTC

I actually liked the "strike her" line. It adds intensity. Great job. :)

Re: Great Story abelard369 February 22 2006, 17:25:04 UTC

Thanks, I really appreciate that!!!

latteaddict February 22 2006, 10:29:15 UTC

I love this fic :)

I know I already left FB elsewhere, but I forgot to say how much I love the structure of this story. The way the sentences and paragraphs stretch and contract around a points you are making has a very poetic feel about it. I think it actually improves the potency of what you are writing. Brilliant!!

abelard369 February 22 2006, 17:24:28 UTC

Your comments mean everything to me, Martha. And thank you for all of the LJ help, too!!!!! You are the greatest.

___grey___ February 22 2006, 11:06:43 UTC

A good story, it's a bit different than the avergae, but very nice job!

abelard369 February 22 2006, 17:25:31 UTC

Thank you! I hope "different" is good!

nytel February 22 2006, 18:31:39 UTC

I like! You did a very nice insight into Lee's thoughts.

abelard369 February 22 2006, 19:03:15 UTC

Thank you so much, nytel! Your feedback means a lot to me!

roofietoof February 22 2006, 20:01:50 UTC

I just gotta say, I love the layout of this story. It's all internal, which fits Apollo to a T. He is a very hold-it-all-in kinda guy.

And I really loved how all of this was going on, but because it is all in his head, only moments have passed and they are still holding hands.

Watching "The Captain's Hand" I got a bigger tingle from watching the handshake than from Lee/Dee's entire bunkroom romp. And I think you captured WHY quite beautifully with this story.

Thanks :)

abelard369 February 22 2006, 22:14:19 UTC

Oh, totally, that handshake had so much chemistry, and the director made sure to note that they were holding hands throughout their talk, only breaking away to hug. They *are* the ship; all else is distraction.

Thank you so very much for your kind feedback!! Btw, I love all of your stories (which I comment on in ff.net)!