April: Brigit's Flame, WK 2

[a_selfish_meme]

PROMPT: Happy as a Clam
Warnings: dirty language, violence
This is what happened when I teleported Ash the Douchebag, my Dungeons and Dragons character into a 'modern' alternative reality.

Zombieporn (part 1)
Pleased to meet you. My name is Ash, and I am a douchebag.

Or rather the Douchebag. That's the glorious title I'd earned back in high school

Comments

[a_selfish_meme]

Whoops, sorry everyone!! SOOOooo many typos.

[sour_plums]

I really love the way this is written. I admire the way that it flows.

I especially love this part;

"I sigh, sitting down on the steps of a convenience store offa route 23. It is a hot and humid Missouri summer. I pop open a bag of Funions and take a swig of a Colt.
Then, I spit juicily and think of my predicament.
And also of what my late grand-uncle, the one that fucked up my eye used to say: “sonny, every sonnabitch knows even a rep is only good in moderation."

It really sets a good premise for the story.

I like that you used casual language, being the narrator's voice. However, it didn't seem that you were just throwing in cuss words to sound cool, they really worked.

I hope you continue this!
I found this on Brigit's Flame by the way.
I'm going to friend you so I can keep up with this story in particular. Good luck

[a_selfish_meme]

Wooo, I'm really glad you liked Ash the Douchebag! He's the most hilarious character to write about and I'm definitely going to keep his adventures going. And thanks for bearing with all the bizarre typos and mistakes (this was the brainchild of a sleepless night in vegas).

[blythe025]

Nicely done! The antics of the douchbag are most amusing. I look forward to reading the continuation. :)