God, this poem fucking sucked

[a_crimson_tear]

I'll scream out in my sleep

Comments

[monothevirus]

i don't think it sucks at all
i like it
i like it a lot. especially the first part.

[a_crimson_tear]

awww, thanks Leah =)

i think it sucks.

[kissoffire]

not really. i just umm...like to be contradictory.
hey it makes me totally think of betrayal and hurt..very well conveyed.
It shows that when you have that much pain..your innocence, the purest of motives, the wanting the best for that person..all that fades and is replaced by something sinister that you didn't know you had inside you.

"I hope that your screams,, echo throughout a room"

AND that i would of related to a Tomb somehow..both in metaphor and in ryhme. but thats me..oh i wrote the sickest thing..only i need to translate it into digital..but i know you'd understand it so ill mail it to you when i get it done. Its so strong you cant just read it. You either won't get it or it'll knock you flat.
But you'll get it.
oh well we aughta hang. like, as in socially, not in a double-team suicide kind of way.

Long reply.
No Point.

Re: i think it sucks.

[a_crimson_tear]

I didn't mean it as in a tomb. Meant it as just an ear-peircingly loud scream

[a_crimson_tear]

I loved your analyzation of it tho dood. we need to hang out more