Comments | __vam: Alrighty then.

crayon_addict88 in __vam

Alrighty then.

Mar 10, 2008 18:35

Before.
There was a story here.
But, Now I don't like it.
'Cause it needs improvement.

You people just seem so PRO!
So,
Can people give me some tips for writing?

Thanks.
crayon_addict88
XO.

Comments 7

elterriblefizzy March 10 2008, 07:56:49 UTC

First off, you really need an LJ cut. It's the rules.

Second off, just at a glance, you need to capitalize the beginnings of sentences, I's, and not capitalize words in the middle of sentences.

If you want, I'll read through it and correct what I think necessary, but other wise, I HIGHLY suggest you use a beta reader.

elterriblefizzy March 10 2008, 08:01:14 UTC

Also, do you mean Jonna or Jonne?

Jonne is a the lead singer of Negative and a boy.

Jonna is Ville's ex.

jezebel1386 March 10 2008, 08:08:58 UTC

I would second everything Fizzy says.

And offer you my beta skills.

Oh, and I love your icon.

Johnny rocks my world.

crayon_addict88 March 10 2008, 09:31:25 UTC

AHHH!
*Hides in shame*

Yes, Fizzy, I'd like that,
also..
*Hangs head low*
What's a beta reader

crayon_addict88 March 10 2008, 09:39:29 UTC

Okay, also What's an LJ Cut?
Ahh!
*cowers* I Don't know anything!
I'm Seriously no good at this.
I Feel like an Idiot.

I Fixed a few things but I don't think I got everything.
I feel stupid :(

elterriblefizzy March 10 2008, 10:58:15 UTC

Don't feel stupid. It's alright. An LJ cut is the little link you see and click before you read a story. A beta reader is someone who looks over your story before you post it to catch all those grammatical errors we were talking about before. They are good things. Are you new to LJ?

I'll help you. I like the concept of your story a lot. I read through it when it was still up. There are several ways it can go, it just has to be brought about subtly.

If you have AIM, you should IM me at jpopfizzy or I can help you via email.

Either way, I'm here to help you. :D

slasher48 March 12 2008, 16:32:19 UTC

*seconds Fizzy in her current brain-less state*

*will return with other advice later*

Ooh. Thought of something.

Don't be discouraged if people name your errors or if you get con crit. Take it and use it. It will help you.

Sorry I can't offer more. I am in a hurry to scurry off and finish the Vam I missed yesterday. Damn writing bug biting me and all.

But seriously, Fizzy knows her stuff. She's phenomenal. Listen to whatever she says. :)