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conjure_lass in __vam

Well...I promised a fic eventually....

Nov 13, 2005 21:18

And here it is ( Read more... )

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grumpybluebear November 14 2005, 04:00:34 UTC

oh this is a great start dear.
I'm very interested to see how all this turns out for the guys and I love long chapters, so bring 'um on :)

conjure_lass November 14 2005, 04:12:15 UTC

I had some reservations on making it first person perspective. Do you think I should continue it that way or shove it into third person? Not sure.

grumpybluebear November 14 2005, 04:43:48 UTC

I wouldn't change a thing about the persepctive. Leaving the narrative in first person perspective gives the reader, at least in my opinion, more of a mental and emotional connection to the characters.

revalla November 14 2005, 04:31:15 UTC

Oh, wow. Loved the dream sequence. First person works well, especially if you plan to do more with the dreams.

Long chapters? Excellent. :)

conjure_lass November 14 2005, 04:46:08 UTC

The author can't give away too many secrets...but the dream sequence thing is going to be a thing that I keep going. *smile* Oh you know what some of them are going to be right?

I'm a dirty dirty girl..

revalla November 14 2005, 04:52:14 UTC

Fine, keep your secrets. Just keep the dreams coming. ;)

Feh. Clean is for losers.

conjure_lass November 14 2005, 04:56:38 UTC

Agreed. And I shall keep the dreams comin'. Oh...if you have any requests for dreams let me know. I can work just about anything into a dream sequence.

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katezinha November 14 2005, 15:50:06 UTC

Beautiful. :) Cannot wait for more. Seriously, it's always lovely to find a new writer that can actually convey emotion and poetry with simple enough words and ideas. Doesn't happen as much as it should.

conjure_lass November 15 2005, 00:58:52 UTC

*blush again* What a fine compliment that is. I wasn't really trying to like...write poetry. But Ville's first person perspective tends to come out that way. I'm making a real effort to make the two first person voices distinct. I hate it when people write first person and everyone "sounds" the same. I hope I pull it off for you guys.

katezinha November 15 2005, 10:03:41 UTC

Aye, one of my pet hates too. :)

morphine300mg November 14 2005, 18:12:18 UTC

Wow, that was great! I love this. Keep it up!

alatariel3 November 14 2005, 21:11:59 UTC

I really liked this. One of the few stories I've ever read where the first person didn't bother me. Keep going please.