Noah Compton: Part 1

[__firecracker]

I have just completed the first part of a two-part story! If any of you would be so kind to read it, that would be lovely...

Enjoy: Of all days to eat at ‘Kopps Pot’, when the weather was blistering and feverish. Gee, Noah sure could have picked them. And when it came to restaurants, when the weather was too hot to cook, the man decided to come to

Comments

[ex_chicha141]

After reading this, I finally figured out what I like the most about your writting (and what comes as a solid second). I like the short, cynical/funny things you write at the end of a sentence or a thought that only the reader/character might think of in the back of their head that really doesn't HAVE to be in the story. Like, From Shelly, with love. I actually laughed out loud from that one. XD

AND, I like the inside jokes you put in. XD The SEARS COMMERCIALS I hate. ("'NOTHER SCORCHER!") The guy being so white he's pink. I love it.

OH! And I also like it when you put in stuff from REAL LIFE into stories to make the characters/stories more real. I don't think there was one in this one yet, but there's usually one or two in the other stories you write. I'm talking about like, song lyrics or artists....yeah? Like Greg hating Bowie....yeahhhh. XD

I like how this story is working out so far. :D It's morbid and it reminds me a lot of every pizza dump I've ever been to in my life. You're really good at imagery. I've gotta admit that I'm a LITTLE confused, but remember, I'm stupid. XD PLUS, you're only half done and thus....you have another half to help me along, there. (Like, LOTR is the best and I didn't get the entire story plot until like the second movie was done.) I bet if I reread it I'll catch on a little easier. Eh, I think I know what's going on. :D

Yayyyy for stories! Like Aubrey says, it's catchy and I wanna know what goes on next. I envy your writting skills, you come up with these story plots that would be really difficult to write about/get and make it easy to picture. YOU MAKE IT LOOK EASY....AND IT'S NOT. RAH.

[__firecracker]

It's confusing? All right. I'll patch holes up. xD! Maybe you can re-read it for me and tell me what doesn't make sense to you. Thanks for the criticism. I'll work on that. ^_~

Yeah! xD Inside jokes.