You have some serious drabble writing talent! The style is awesome, where yo have a split between the times Jiyong feels like crying for no reason and the times he feels like smiling for no reason and Seunghyun always being there for him doing the right things. I really like the atmosphere here too and there's some beautiful lines. 'Jiyong closes his eyes and let's them haunt him until morning.'
Maybe drabble-writing is my only 'talent' though, because once I start writing longer stuff the quality goes way below point zero. :'D (Which is also painfully obvious in the chaptered story I'm trying right now. I think it's because I start focussing more on describing what is happening and loose sight of characterisation and general moody-ness and everything that makes fiction tasty.)
Ack, LOL I have the same problem but the opposite! I have problems more with the plot though which is probably worse! :3 I always feel like describing their characters and the atmosphere. I'm gonna scoot over and read your chaptered story haha. I'm sure your fic is delicious - writers are always the biggest self-critics! ;)
Feel free to tear it down after reading, I can use the critique! (And don't worry, being dutch & being an art student taught me to handle a whole bunch of that painfully honesty-stuff)
Constructive crit is the best - I found you through the anonymous feedback meme actually because you were the post below me I think. :3 I don't have much to say so far, maybe get someone to beta because there are tiny and I mean tiny things that you probably know about but just missed because when we read our own things our minds fill in any blanks and gloss over any mistakes. We know what we mean sort of thing. In fact I'd probably only do that for really long pieces because getting a beta can be a lot of trouble to go through!
Not on LJ, some on DA but I try to not link this account to any other online stuff. Fanfiction is still my dirty little secret, haha. But... I could link some in PM also if you want to xD
I actually found someone who was lovely enough to offer to beta for me! Starting next chapter of PR I hope those kind of mistakes will be filtered out.
I'll try to leave some crit. for you too, then. Even though it's prob. not that anon anymore :'D
The style is awesome, where yo have a split between the times Jiyong feels like crying for no reason and the times he feels like smiling for no reason and Seunghyun always being there for him doing the right things. I really like the atmosphere here too and there's some beautiful lines.
'Jiyong closes his eyes and let's them haunt him until morning.'
Wonderful. Memming this :D
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Maybe drabble-writing is my only 'talent' though, because once I start writing longer stuff the quality goes way below point zero. :'D (Which is also painfully obvious in the chaptered story I'm trying right now. I think it's because I start focussing more on describing what is happening and loose sight of characterisation and general moody-ness and everything that makes fiction tasty.)
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I'm gonna scoot over and read your chaptered story haha. I'm sure your fic is delicious - writers are always the biggest self-critics! ;)
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Feel free to tear it down after reading, I can use the critique! (And don't worry, being dutch & being an art student taught me to handle a whole bunch of that painfully honesty-stuff)
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Constructive crit is the best - I found you through the anonymous feedback meme actually because you were the post below me I think. :3 I don't have much to say so far, maybe get someone to beta because there are tiny and I mean tiny things that you probably know about but just missed because when we read our own things our minds fill in any blanks and gloss over any mistakes. We know what we mean sort of thing. In fact I'd probably only do that for really long pieces because getting a beta can be a lot of trouble to go through!
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I actually found someone who was lovely enough to offer to beta for me! Starting next chapter of PR I hope those kind of mistakes will be filtered out.
I'll try to leave some crit. for you too, then. Even though it's prob. not that anon anymore :'D
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That's awesome, congrats lol :D It's fine if it's not anon anyways, kill my ego ahaha.
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