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Comfortability

Nov 14, 2012 22:07

Title: Comfortability
Author: 3star4life
Pairing: DooWoon
Rating: R
Summary: Doojoon finds his comfort.

( The days were ordinary, the tasks a routine, the life empty. )

fandom: b2st, pairing: doowoon, rating: r

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3star4life November 15 2012, 03:08:40 UTC

Spot to leggymimi!! ^_^

leggymimi November 15 2012, 05:02:03 UTC

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leggymimi November 15 2012, 21:19:19 UTC

"Dressed in nothing but Doojoon's thin, white wrinkled shirt and white tube socks, Dongwoon sat on the edge of the bed, one knee pulled up close to his chest while the other dangled to the floor."
^You're trying to kill me. You're trying to fucking murder my ass. Like, what the fuck is that? You described Dongwoon as this...............this fucking........angel.... This beautiful celestial being and I just.... He is a whore without being a whore, you know? YOU KNOW? OAO I'M NOT MAKING ANY SENSE BUT OKAY, YOU KNOW, FUCK IT. I LOVED THAT DESCRIPTION. HE IS A FUCKING CHINA DOLL.

Now before I get all incoherent, I mustmustMUUUUUST say how beautifully CLEAN this whole fic was. :D I mean, you always write clean stuff -- and for that I am envious -- and by "clean" I mean it's straight to the point and not all up in the air and off in tangents -- like me. -v- It's just so easy to follow along with, and your clean style of writing was SUPER for this fic. <3 Alright, now that that's done, that's probably the only coherent thing that'll be in ( ... )

leggymimi November 15 2012, 21:21:19 UTC

"Doojoon's hand picked up speed, the male underneath him starting to pant and whine. Hovering on top, his eyes remained glued to Dongwoon, his head moving from side to side as he tried to gain control of himself but he couldn't. It was cute, the frustration the boy underneath him expressed. And he couldn't fuckin' stand it. Doojoon knew the exact same part was played out in front of another man and it must have been just as cute; the dark brown orbs glossy with water and need, the soft, pink tulips quivering with pleasure as small moans and mewls blew out of them, the scrunching of that sharp nose noting how hard it is becoming to keep still, the sweaty strands of dirty-blond hair sticking to the forehead."^.___________ ( ... )

3star4life November 17 2012, 02:38:01 UTC

Oh, dear, I didn't realize it was this serious! NOOOOOO!! YOU CAN'T DIE ON ME, DAMMIT! WE MUST SHARE THE LOVE OF DOOWOON!!!!! lol
BB comments like yours makes it worth the entire writing process! I love your comments and they were not crazy lol.

Thank you so much for the compliment because dear I'm always worried if people will be able to understand what I write since all my first draft of essays are so incoherent.

As for the ex...I was going to mention the name but then I thought that would distract the reader from the overall story lol. well, it's not really anyone from beast...O_O it's someone kinda random you may think ^-^

As for Doojoon's anger,I guess you could say he's like that old man angry at everything and Wooniee is supposed to be that 'stress relief'...not [only] in a sexual way but also with companionship...he just happens to get jealous O_O lol

3star4life November 17 2012, 02:43:37 UTC

You understood the met part? YAYA~~~~~ I wasn't sure if people would but it just made sense to me...yeah hehe

Oh Doojoon most definitely go ape shit, unfortunately I still haven't found the right heart or mind to write on it :/ which is great you did! we all love sweet doowoon but your[occasional] angst doowoon is necessary to show that this can be[IS -_-] a real relationship and not just all cutesy and loveable, even though doowoon are cutesy and loveable and the fuckability is so fuckable...I don't know what I just wrote O_O

You're welcome dear and thank you for the sweet, inspiring, motivating comments!!! Love you Bee!!!!

3star4life November 17 2012, 02:45:12 UTC

Oh yes, I must correct you on one part of your comments: Queens* ^_^ Actually you'd be the queen and I'd be the B+ student from How-to-be-a-Queen -Academy [too corny? :/]

leggymimi November 20 2012, 20:03:19 UTC

YES IT IS THAT SERIOUS. WOONIE IS ANGELIC. WHERE ARE HIS LITTLE ANGEL WINGS? Q-Q

Ohhh, and I like your tactic because if you HAD'VE mentioned the ex my mind would've wandered off in tangents about this and that and ALTHOUGH I LOVE DOOWOON my mind would've been like "well what happened between them and this and that" and indeed I would've been distracted. WELL DONE.

Old man Doo~~~ Hee hee, well it's a good thing Woonie's there by his side. I think Doojoon would've blown up a building or some shit with all his pent-up stress. Aww Dongwoonie~ Look at how important you are. You're saving people's lives and you don't even know it. xD

OF COURSE I UNDERSTOOD. MY MIND IS CONSTANTLY IN THE GUTTER. <3 IT WAS GENIUS AND I WAS LIKE "OOOHHHH~~ Look at Runi ( ... )

3star4life December 8 2012, 02:26:28 UTC

lol "blown up a building or some shit with all his pent-up stress." this made me laugh but true his crazy ass would have O_O I guess Dongwoon in pain just makes him looks ever the more innocent-looking? Well I guess we're sadist...I admit it! I just can't write it for some reason...but perhaps in the future.

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