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dawnangel14 in 30_onepiece

Treasure Hunt

Aug 15, 2011 01:22

Here it goes, my first piece is ready. Hope you enjoy!

Title: Treasure Hunt

Theme: #9 Treasure

Claim: ZoroxNami

Words: 1649

Rating: PG

Warnings: Mild language (Hey, it's Zoro and Nami we're talking about!). Takes place before entering the Grand Line, but after Loguetown.

Disclaimer: I do not own One Piece. Just in case you confused me with the genius that ( Read more... )

dawnangel14 - set#06 - zoro x nami

Comments 5

zelda_addict August 15 2011, 13:11:16 UTC

I think I can understand why this piece is set where it is, but I believe the first time Nami mentions the debt is at Whiskey Peak. (It's also waaay more than 300, but I digress...)

The part about her being able to answer that her life is more important than the treasure is sweet. I was also amused by the whole, "Hold my hand." "Why?" "So we don't get separated. What were you thinking?" conversation.

There are a few small typos here and there, but overall not bad. Nice work on your first piece!

dawnangel14 August 15 2011, 17:18:31 UTC

I know the debt was mentioned for the first time in Whiskey Peak during the whole Vivi incident, but I thought she could've used it earlier, since he did give her the money she lent her after Loguetown and I thought she could've just mentioned there "hey, where's my interest?" or something of the sort.

And I wasn't sure if it was 300 or 300,000. I suck at maths and couldn't remember exactly which number was it either xD Was it 300,000? I think I'll look it up and edit it.

Thanks! I appreciate the comment :)

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dawnangel14 August 16 2011, 17:57:10 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you do :D

t_rexan September 5 2011, 14:44:24 UTC

Zoro's debt is probably at least 10,000 berries, since a berry is used more as a measurement of yen than dollars. (Currently, about 77 yen = one dollar.)

Good fic, though! :D There were some mistakes that you should catch if you skim read through it again, but I enjoyed reading it. ^^

And, ah, I believe that the f-word is a bit more than "Mild language" as you said in the warning. |D

dawnangel14 September 7 2011, 17:17:08 UTC

Yeah, I think I'll edit the debt part later, I hate currency it's just too complicated xD

Thanks for commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'll work on those mistakes you mentioned!