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[Fruits Basket] Haru/Rin, #20

Aug 21, 2006 23:02

Title: The Map of Her Body
Author: Ysabet MacFarlane (umadoshiPairing: Sohma Hatsuharu and Sohma Isuzu (Rin ( Read more... )

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miyabita13 August 22 2006, 02:50:36 UTC

I love the way so many of your sentences seem beautifully poetic. The last line, especially, was particularly touching. Ysa, this was wonderful. ^_^ Thank you!

umadoshi August 22 2006, 03:03:23 UTC

*^^* Thanks! I'm glad it worked for you.

(My headspace is a little screwed up about it right now--I just finished posting some odd semi-meta things that came up while I was editing it. And the song that the title and framework came from, because I'm a dork like that. ^_^)

miyabita13 August 22 2006, 03:52:04 UTC

Well, the song seems very pretty lyric wise. ^^ I had never heard of Tori Amos until I started talking to you and Flamika. XD *currently on an Anna Nalick kick*

umadoshi August 22 2006, 10:51:44 UTC

"Seaside" is a lovely little song--it's not one of my very favorites, but I like listening to it. ^^

I have some Anna Nalick downloaded (already had both of the songs you linked the other day), but I haven't spent a lot of time listening to new things recently.

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hymnia August 22 2006, 04:24:18 UTC

That was so beautiful.

umadoshi August 22 2006, 10:52:49 UTC

Thank you! ^_^

springgreen August 22 2006, 04:35:31 UTC

Oh, I like! Particularly the first bit, with its descriptions of Rin's bones and scars.

umadoshi August 22 2006, 10:56:06 UTC

Thanks! The first chunk is the part I've had longest--I think it's the only bit that didn't get bitched at in rewrites. ^^

f_ireworks August 22 2006, 11:13:00 UTC

That was beautiful. I love the lyricism behind your prose, and this piece in particular was amazing, but my favorite thing about it is the awesome characterization. I just love your interpretation of Haru; he is such a boy and yet such a man at once, and it's amazing how that comes across. I love how he sees her, and how she responds to him. Beautiful!

My favorite line:
[...]but beauty is only beauty, a birthright of their family. The flaws are different, are hers, history embedded in flesh and bone, meant to be cherished. Here, this happened here, and you're still walking and unbroken.

Thanks!

umadoshi August 23 2006, 01:24:25 UTC

he is such a boy and yet such a man at once

*^^* I'm really glad that comes through, because I definitely see him as a mix of awkward and adolescent but way too old for his years. But it's not something I know how to pin down or convey deliberately.

Thank you!

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umadoshi August 23 2006, 01:38:05 UTC

I tend to avoid phrasing it as 'eating disorder'*, but her relationship with food and her body is something that really intrigues me (ditto Haru's reaction to it, which I figure must have changed after ch. 106-107). I ended up posting about it a bit last night, after I posted this fic, because editing this crystalized some things for me, but I think I'm still working through it in my head. ^^

Thanks, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

* not because I think her relationship with food *isn't* disordered, because it clearly is, but because the term tends to make a lot of people think strictly in terms of anorexia and/or bulimia, neither of which really applies to her.