Theme 15 Memory, Passage of Time, Seasons

[wolfchildblazer]

Author: Kagewolfchild

Theme: #15 Memory, Passage of time, Seasons.

Title: Saving Grace

Summary: All that was left to them was a passage of time, both cursed with immortality. After first loves die all they have is each other and the reminiscing on how they came to be.

Pairing/Characters: Setsuna Meiou/Angel (BtVS, Angel)

Rating: PG-13/Teen

Disclaimer: I

Comments

Re: Review

[wolfchildblazer]

Thanks, and it's okay, I understand the whole fact that life just drains sometimes. I'll definitely take your advice and give it another glance over. I noticed my grammar has been getting lose which is puzzling at best. As far as Setsuna following him after the Angelus comment is she strikes me as someone who would investigate a threat, I didn't mean to leave it open as a trust issue. I'll see what I can do for that. Thank you for your time.

[samisweet]

Sorry for the lateness of this, but people were begging me to update *something* so I spent yesterday finishing up a short chapter and posting it ^_^

I do agree with what Cygnea had to say. You changed tense a few times throughout the piece, but it can be fixed. You also had a few grammar errors concerning fragments and I caught a few misplaced words/wording that could have been done better in the sentence.

Also, there were some instances where Setsuna's character was a bit off, like Cygnea mentioned. The flashbacks could have been done in a bit more of vague fashion as well.

Overall, it wasn't bad. Setsuna's a character that's rarely pursued, so kudos to you on working with her. I look forward to more from you (especially on your FFN pieces ^_^V)

-samisweet

[wolfchildblazer]

Again, I'll definitely go over both my pieces and review my grammar again. Hmm, as for the flashbacks, this was truly the first time I attempted it that way. Thanks for reviewing though.