Keep Me Close- Chapter XIII
Team: San Jose Sharks
Pairing: Joe Thornton/Evgeni Nabokov
Rating: Not quite PG-13, but enough language to make it a little more than PG
Summary: Not all in San Jose is sunny as the path to the Stanley Cup proves to be as difficult as ever; falling in love might be the simplest task on this year’s agenda.
Editor: Sherlockelly
Chapter I ( Read more... )
1. Oh he's an ass but I love Todd <3 The way he and Joe were in the office, I swear you must've been a fly on the wall or something cause that was perfection. And Joe, going all ape-man-like just for Evgeni, he's so cute, lol.
2. “Knowing you, you’d prohbably go out there shirtless,” oh Nabby, I love youuu. That line is just... priceless. And I bet if he could, Joe would totally do that, lol.
3. Joe staring at Nabs lips and tongue *giggles*
4. Omg! the phone call was just adorable. Especially Evgeni calling Joe a bastard and an asshole.
5. I have to make another comment about the phone call because it was so damn cute! I mean, they watch bad movies together? They are like a couple already, they just don't do the naughty things *pout* lol
6. Bathroom... um, yeah, Joe's eyes are starting to wander :D
7. But he still believes in this hope, however tattered it may be. It is still flickering in and around him, giving him reason by merely being. That is just... incredible. I mean, seriously it's just profound and felt and brilliant.
8. I'm going to kick Evgeni in the ass, hmm yeah? After I find out why he lied and scared Joe, lol.
I LOVE the way you write. Seriously. Idk what it is but I know from the first chapter to this, it's improved more and it's even better than before. It's amazing because you can feel all these emotions from Joe and Nabby. It's like I'm there, watching the whole thing play out, not reading chapter-by-chapter. And all the small minor details that most people over look or don't bother to write in at all, you fill it in and makes it even better because I don't have to imagine or wonder -- I can just see it. And you don't go for cutesy, "okay, it's been long enough, lets throw 'em together and suddenly realize their feelings". You can see how far Joe and Evgeni have come and how much they care and mean to each other. And the twist? Perfect timing because it's not something that just suddenly happens, all the little stuff -again- helps it and it's just bloody perfect. *sigh*
And that's all I can think of to say, haha. But yeah, this beyond lived up to my expectations :D
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All you can think to say is more than enough
wow
I don't know if the story makes you as happy as this review makes me, but damn
SO um... list? Would that be stupid if I listed back? Idc, I hate it when people don't answer all me questions
1. Todd is a freaking god in my mind, and it's unfortunate how indredibly assy I made him in the beginning. Because now I'm like I want to make him awesome! But I can only do that so much at a time to make it realistic... :/ He's getting better though right? (But what I wouldn't do to be a fly on their walls)
2) All I could think of when I was writing the locker rooms part was that Joe had to be shirtless. I mean... have you seen his interviews? When the hell does he actually wear a shirt??
3) FINALLY some unknown sexual attraction
4) At first it was going to be 'hey!' 'hey back!' 'i miss you' 'i miss you too' 'okay we're bffs bye' 'kbye' (or something of the sort) but Joe needs to add a little spice to their nonexistant relationship ever once in a while
5) If only they would do the naughty things :( Friends with benefits perhaps?
6) see #3 and add excessive exclamation points
7) *blush* I really don't know what to say to that
8) yup! I bet you weren't expecting that, were you? ;) ~plot twist!~
SO.UM.YEAH. other than listing things I am speechless. I mean give me a prompt and I could write about it forever. Say amazing things and I have no idea what to do with them except stare at them and giggle insanely. (I have done that quite a few times while reading this btw)
*sigh* I was just thinking about the earlier chapters yesterday, and for you to say that the story has improved means so much to me. Like, I can't even begin to say...
And you also know exactly what to say to make me so confident about continuing this story! I am so worried about their emotions, because I realized that I don't state them outright, I just explain what they are doing. But... here you are saying that you can see this actually happening.
The thing I've told myself from the start was that it was going to be a real love story. One where after you read this you watch a Shark game and think that Joe and Evgeni are getting it on ;)
But really, thankyouthankyouthankyou so much! <3 Pardon the excessive review to your review, I just have a lot of time on my hands :/
(next chapter to come soon!)
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Nope, not stupid at all. I think it's awesome when someone takes the time to reply back especially when it was as long as this was, lol.
I flove Todd <3 and noticed you weren't making him such as ass anymore cause he can't do a complete 180 out of seemingly no where >_<
2) I see Joe in a shirt... uh. When I watched the All-Star red carpet! but I'm not complaining :S
4, 5) Spice between him and Evgeni is a very good thing ;] And friends with benefits works, I wouldn't complain :)
8) Not really. Especially after the shower scene *sigh* Poor Nabby.
No need to try to explain, I fully understand. From my days of Gilmore Girls fics.
But yeah, how you write emotions, without coming right out and saying, is wonderful. I think that's what I love the most because you haven't done any of that with Joe but everyone -or atleast me- can jus understand/feel what he does.
Well, you succeeded because I see those two on my TV and wonders what's happened and what their gonna do ;)
I'll pardon your if you pardon me back because I have a lot of time on my hands too. I even listed back (kinda) :P
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No list back :O
but you continue what you're doing and I'll be glad to write more/faster/better/all of the above :)
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