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Drabbles

Sep 15, 2010 09:39

Author: cybertoothtiger
Rating: PG
Summary: A few drabbles written for a character & first line meme. First two are versions of the same prompt with Jack/Renee, third is Jack/Teri, fourth is Chloe and Prescott, and fifth is Kim, Jack and BB Teri.
A/N: Don't own 24. If I did, things would be different.
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For leigh57 , 24: Jack/Renee:

( “You’ve got it backwards.” )

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cybertoothtiger September 16 2010, 21:40:47 UTC

Hi! Thank you so much for commenting. Especially the part about not normally liking a Chloe fic. That means a lot.

As for the UTD, all mothers are issued with one on the birth of their first child. This is so they can keep track of all the belongings of every member of the household at all times, didn't you know? ;)

Aaaaaaah. You have the icon of that scene! My icon was from thecandystore, but I have no idea where she got it. It fits Jack sooooo well.

leigh57 September 16 2010, 21:17:50 UTC

Well you already heard my explosive squee about the ones for me:) God I need more Jack/Renee fic in my life. Stop making signs and write me some, dammit! Some that isn't a drabble! See how obnoxious and demanding I am? Yeah.

And are you trying to kill me with the angst here? I love the Chloe/Prescott one, because damn. What parent hasn't had that exact conversation about six kazillion times before their child is five? But then with the BILL? Oh, that's just cruel! Sigh. I miss him so much. But my smushy heart just loves that even though Chloe will never be at her best when interacting with other humans, when push comes to shove she does exactly what needs to be done. *sniff*

Also, how much can I thank you for writing some Jack/Kim/Teri? (Yay Rachel for the prompt!) I hate so much about S8, but the thing I hate most besides Renee being all dead is the fact that well, basically her death caused Jack to be an impulsive moron and throw his life down the drain. I hate that he doesn't get to spend time with Kim and watch Teri grow up, ( ... )

cybertoothtiger September 16 2010, 21:43:47 UTC

Snicker. I threw out a small blue ceramic square and bit of broken shell I found on the floor by the shoes this week, only to be told tearfully that they belonged to someone else. And they were from Mexico. Oy. Is it any wonder my house looks the way it does?

God, I love Kim so much now too. I always kinda did, because she has always been a mini Jack, just with less experience and judgement. But in S1, she is all about taking risks and doing whatever it takes to save the people she cares about. I admire her for that.

tara_smith September 16 2010, 21:41:17 UTC

GAAAAHHH, Jack and Renee are so adorable, in that..'I can kill you with whatever happens to be available kind of way.'

I kind of enjoyed Jack struggling with Renee's bra strap.

On a side note, I have just recently become a 'serial commenter,' so this is coming just a little late but, "Visitation" and "Where are we going?" are both phenomenal, and are permanently bookmarked in my 'favorite fic' folder, so thank you for them- I have read them..um..an embarrassing number of times at least once. :)

cybertoothtiger September 17 2010, 17:21:55 UTC

Really? You have them bookmarked? That made my day! Thank you so much!

Serial commenters are most welcome.

Jack and Renee are so adorable, in that..'I can kill you with whatever happens to be available kind of way.'

Ha! So true. They really are.

adrenalin211 September 17 2010, 03:57:29 UTC

Well I hope I already conveyed to you my LOVE for the Jack/Renee!

I'm SO glad I gave you the Chloe/Prescott prompt because, see, I'm interested in Chloe as a Mom. And, actually oddly, I'm always interested to read the different ways in which people characterize her. IMO lots of people can easily overdo it on the social oblivion and verbal diarrhea, but I think you got her JUST RIGHT here in terms of thought process. And AUGH you tied it in with BILL. And ... did I mention AUGH?

she hugged his tiny body tight to hers for a long time. That’s what a normal mother would do. - I LOVE THAT SO MUCH! I love the whole scene and how true-to-life it is. NICE ( ... )

cybertoothtiger September 17 2010, 17:24:02 UTC

You. You're comments always make me smile so hard.

Chloe is so hard to write, and I honestly wasn't sure about this, so I'm relieved it rings true for you.

WHY, WHY SO DEPRESSING, SHOW?

*sigh*

century_fox September 23 2010, 00:51:46 UTC

I love all of these so much!

The characterization in the first Jack/Renee one is so perfect- Jack's determination to be able to do everything himself and frustration when he can't, and Renee wanting to help and not wanting to see him struggle. I can picture that scene so clearly.

Renee’s mouth hitched up in the beginning of a smile, but it was left incomplete as his lips covered hers. This line was adorable and made me all smiley. :)

She knew that as soon as the EMTs had patched him up with binder twine and sticky tape, Jack would be out there looking for them again, too. Even though no one had looked for him. GAHHHH. This line…I can’t even. And I loved Renee rubbing his back “almost subconsciously.” ♥

I know I reviewed the Jack/Teri one, but I can't get over how much I loved you writing it from Teri's perspective. You made me feel like I know and understand her, despite never having seen S1.

You did such a great job with the Chloe/Prescott one. I loved how adamant he was about wanting the lunchbox with the dinosaur, and He ( ... )

cybertoothtiger October 12 2010, 01:52:09 UTC

Oh, bb, you are so unfailingly sweet, and here I've let your comment languish all by itself for weeks, yo.

Thank you so much for saying such lovely things, and for putting up with me!