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Running From Mercy

Jul 25, 2010 14:34

Title: Running From Mercy
Author: leigh57
Characters: Jack Bauer, Renee Walker
Summary: Still, it would have been nice if he kissed her someplace besides her forehead, or slid the palm of his hand down her arm (the way he had that morning, when she’d stretched out on top of him, moving without thought, unaware of what a privilege it was to be able to rub ( Read more... )

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adrenalin211 July 25 2010, 18:38:23 UTC

LOOK AT THAT!
*dies* and the hot rumbling part is dedicated to MOI? More later but I just had to say I AM SO PROUD OF YOU for finishing this despite all the fucking obstacles and what have you.

leigh57 July 25 2010, 19:18:05 UTC

YOU GAVE ME THE THREEFER ICON!!! Gah. I love that one. I love eight million of them.

I did finish it, for whatever the hell that is worth, and I wouldn't have without you, so thank you, babe. Really. &hearts

Also, I get to cross off one more sex thing I have now written.

p.s. And bb, you don't even know how much I appreciate you taking one of the team and watching part of the taxi. You know why I can't do it right now, but you also know I can't deal with fucking up anything canon, so THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!

roseandheather July 25 2010, 18:47:05 UTC

Buh... buh.... unhhh...

You know what I just realized I need? A fic of yours where Jack finds out - after the canon events of Day 8 - that Renee survived after all, and faked her death and went into hiding and didn't tell him because it needed to be convincing and if he wasn't freaking the fuck out it wouldn't be. Or something.

Which is so many levels of not fair for me to ask for, because you had enough trouble with this one and I'm kind of dying of melty heaty shock from just this right now, but I'm craving it like I rarely crave anything. So, you know, if you have extra room in your plot bunny hutch...

And now I'm going to make out with you for such a gorgeous fic. Don't worry, I'm not ugly. ;)

leigh57 July 25 2010, 19:20:20 UTC

Um. About that fic? Yeah. It's actually next on my list (not at all dissimilar to what you described, actually), although by the time it gets out there, I will be super lucky if three people read it, and those three will probably include me. I have no choice there, because I must write post-S8 fic in which Renee is for some reason alive. Oh yes I must.

Thank you for your awesome comment! I'm so glad you enjoyed this, given that I headdesked over it without ceasing. Oy.

roseandheather July 25 2010, 19:32:47 UTC

Girl, I will carry you through writing that fic if I have to. I am not kidding. Like, instant-access-24/7-for-ego-boosts, whatever else you need... I don't care. All I ask in return is, like, two sentences providing Ethanberry some happy resolution.

Of course you have to. Because she is. Even if the evil PTB don't know it yet.

leigh57 July 25 2010, 20:51:30 UTC

Oh she's not dead. Nope. She just isn't. No way dude. And I am going to write that fic. Absolutely. It's just that by the time it's done, it's highly likely that *I* will be the only remaining person on earth who remembers Jack and Renee ever existed:)

And okay! I can try to work some Ethanberry in, but it will probably have to be in dialogue form coming from Jack, because this is going to be a very on-the-run crazy kinda fic. Although wait. Another idea forms in my mind . . . oh brain. We'll see. Thank you for all the support though -- really. Your lovely comments remind me that at least a few people do still ship these two, and that makes me happy:)

effie214 July 25 2010, 19:26:42 UTC

Oh, bless you for this. I love this six kinds of ways from Sunday, but I think the thing I adore most are the little lines that seem so innocuous, but hold so much weight; "he was too close, but never close enough" and the callback to the "we're going to make it. I promise" and her silent answer. That's what made this so perfect. Amazing job as always.

leigh57 July 25 2010, 20:46:02 UTC

I'm a terrible person, because I couldn't even rewatch the taxi scene to make sure I had the dialogue right. My amazing friend adrenalin211 did it for me. But god it's like, for me at this point, fic is healing, which sounds so ridiculous and fucked up, but it's the truth. I'm crossing my fingers that I have the huge one in me, because *I* need to write it whether another soul on the planet reads it or not.

Thank you! I felt so funny about posting this, because it's even more porny than usual for me and I felt insecure about it for a whole host of reasons. I'm so happy you enjoyed it:)

p.s. Your icon is lovely!

marinw July 25 2010, 20:03:14 UTC

Jack had morphed into a sexy male version of her mother. She tried not to consider the levels of wrong in that thought, but it wasn’t far off.

I want one of those!

I love that they go back to Jack's apartment even though that's where Renee was shot, they both need to claim ownership of that p[lace once again.

And this line:

He walked toward the bedroom without even grabbing his boxers.

I. Can't. Even.

So glad to see the com wake up after being catatonic for weeks.

leigh57 July 25 2010, 20:48:30 UTC

I thought about the apartment issue, but it's exactly what you said. I wanted them to be able to go back there, because in my happy little world they face their demons (obviously together because I'm a shippy dork like that). But it's even canonical that they tried to face them together. Stupid writers!

Hehe. I want Jack without boxers, too:) And thank you, but I certainly can't take any credit for waking up the comm. I would never have written this if the porn battle hadn't been coming up. It is sad that the comm is so dead though -- completely a bummer. But you've heard my whole rant on how the sucktasm that was the back third of S8 killed everybody's muse. Tiny fics like this (and hopefully eventually a huge actual Renee resurrection one) make me feel a little better. Thanks for reading!

As the Plot Stiffens..no, the saying is Thickens, right?...Yeah...Thickens!!! =O tara_smith July 25 2010, 22:20:25 UTC

I absolutely love the..um..plot...yeah...the plot..that's it ( ... )

Re: As the Plot Stiffens..no, the saying is Thickens, right?...Yeah...Thickens!!! =O leigh57 July 26 2010, 01:07:12 UTC

Plotwhat? LOL. Given that this was supposed to be just for the porn battle, I don't even know where the entire intro came from.

Thanks so much for taking time to tell me which parts clicked with you -- I appreciate it. As for the video, my friend adrenalin211 caught me before I watched it and was pretty much, "Please. Please promise me you will not watch this." So I'm not going to, at least not now. I've promised myself I won't until I write my huge AU that's been brewing in my head for months. We'll see if I hold out!

And yay that you liked the ending! I kinda stressed a whole lot of this fic, but that in particular, so it makes me smile that it worked for you. Thank god for AU, huh? :)