Finishing up the next update..as we speak..well after I finish typing this and technically we aren't speaking..but you know what I mean. Update coming and help...promise :P
Thanks for reading it. It sounds strange...I will admit it, but it means a lot to me that I am telling a story that I enjoy, but it isn't just me enjoying it. If that makes sense. :)
Na that totally makes sense. When you started it, it was so closely interwoven with the last book that I was wondering how on earth you were going to add a little Hermione and Ginny in there, but I think if J.K Rowling didn't want to take the cliche ending that she did- it would have ended up a lot like this lol. Well minus the handcuffs and half naked Hermione as her audience is quite often for a younger crowd so well done really. I'm enjoying it. :)
Oh my...! I discovered this story yesterday and it's amazing, but how could you??! I need to know what happens next!. After reading this I went and read the bones story,and I love it too ;>
Hehe the Bones story was what I was going to finish up after this one. I love that show and picked the season that was my favorite to write it from. But I will warn that it might get a little dark for a little bit. I do promise though that it will have a happy ending. I probably wont post that story though on the temperance/angela community until I have that completely written.
I just wanted to let you know that I've really enjoyed reading your fan fic. I hope you don't mind if I give you a bit of constructive criticism though?
There are moments where you tend to repeat the same phrase numerous times in the one paragraph. When you switch from one characters POV to another it gets a little confusing, and at times the colloquial language you use somewhat distances the reader from the story.
I love the metaphors and description you've used though. There are some amazing lines that create such a beautiful and vivid picture in my head, and your attention to detail is fantastic.
I don't mind at all. In fact I welcome it. When I first started writing fan fiction I didn't know what I was doing. I would rush things. I would have a great start and then BLAM rushed ending. I didn't know I was doing it, but I had some great people point it out to me and slowly I started to get a little bit better. There were other things that I needed and probably still need to improve on...but anyways my point is, I want to tell a good story. I think that is any goal of any writer. Your constructive criticism helps me imo tell a better story. So thank you.
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They're apart and now the Death Eaters got Hermione? My heart can't handle this :(((
I hope you update soon! :3
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When you started it, it was so closely interwoven with the last book that I was wondering how on earth you were going to add a little Hermione and Ginny in there, but I think if J.K Rowling didn't want to take the cliche ending that she did- it would have ended up a lot like this lol. Well minus the handcuffs and half naked Hermione as her audience is quite often for a younger crowd so well done really. I'm enjoying it. :)
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I discovered this story yesterday and it's amazing, but how could you??! I need to know what happens next!.
After reading this I went and read the bones story,and I love it too ;>
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I just wanted to let you know that I've really enjoyed reading your fan fic. I hope you don't mind if I give you a bit of constructive criticism though?
There are moments where you tend to repeat the same phrase numerous times in the one paragraph. When you switch from one characters POV to another it gets a little confusing, and at times the colloquial language you use somewhat distances the reader from the story.
I love the metaphors and description you've used though. There are some amazing lines that create such a beautiful and vivid picture in my head, and your attention to detail is fantastic.
I hope it wasn't rude of me to offer advice.
Happy writing.
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<3
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