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She Waits - by lonelyangel_x - Undercover Challenge - Green Cortina

May 11, 2009 15:06

First time participator, so I hope I'm doing this correctly.

Title: She Waits
Characters: Test Card Girl
Rating: PG (Green Cortina)
Word Count: 355
Disclaimer: Life on Mars is owned by the BBC and Kudos. This is a non-profit making work of fanfiction.
Summary: Under cover of night she comes.

( She waits )

undercover challenge

Comments 6

lozenger8 May 11 2009, 14:13:53 UTC

This is beautiful. Stunning use of repetition and alliteration. And, yes, Test Card Girl. She is suitably disturbing. I found this incredibly chilling and effective.

lonelyangel_x May 11 2009, 14:27:26 UTC

Thank you so much.

saintvic May 11 2009, 21:34:11 UTC

That is wonderfully atmospheric and paints a fantastically vivid picture. Thank you.

lonelyangel_x May 12 2009, 10:34:15 UTC

Thank you.

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lonelyangel_x February 5 2010, 10:06:38 UTC

Thank you!

basaltgrrl April 5 2011, 11:17:32 UTC

I have endless trouble trying to write the Test Card Girl - but you clearly do not!!! This is very spooky and entirely perfect. I love the comparison of the clown's smile to Sam's, and how he is the thing most out of place... ahhh.