Hi, Earthphoenix, I've read some of your stories, and for me, I'm afraid that the problem is that you fall into the "grey area." You're not a bad writer, so I don't feel the urge to tell you just how bad you are, but you're also not so good a writer that your stories really hold my interest. And as I have little time these days, I tend not to give you much of a chance. The two posters above have already pointed out many of the things that could be improved. I honestly think that you have the potential to become an excellent writer, with feedback. So I apologize for not having commented. If you like, I can take one of your stories (a short one, please, and no chan), and beta it. Be forewarned, I am an exhaustively thorough beta, and I tend to be pretty harsh with my comments, even when I try not to be. You can reply here, or e-mail me at +amaguena+@yahoo.com+ (remove the plus signs).
I am, however, somewhat surprised at your desire to cater to other people's tastes. Surely, if the story is interesting to you personally, you will do a better job of writing it. And furthermore... take me, for example. I have a needle kink, which, as you might imagine, I rarely see written. I wouldn't object if you decided to include that in your next story. I might even have a greater desire to read the story, if you posted up front that that was included. However, I sincerely doubt that it would make me like your story any better, because if you write about that kink, but write about it in the same way that you write everything else, it would again be not bad, but not particularly interesting either.
I've read some of your stories, and for me, I'm afraid that the problem is that you fall into the "grey area." You're not a bad writer, so I don't feel the urge to tell you just how bad you are, but you're also not so good a writer that your stories really hold my interest. And as I have little time these days, I tend not to give you much of a chance. The two posters above have already pointed out many of the things that could be improved. I honestly think that you have the potential to become an excellent writer, with feedback. So I apologize for not having commented. If you like, I can take one of your stories (a short one, please, and no chan), and beta it. Be forewarned, I am an exhaustively thorough beta, and I tend to be pretty harsh with my comments, even when I try not to be. You can reply here, or e-mail me at +amaguena+@yahoo.com+ (remove the plus signs).
I am, however, somewhat surprised at your desire to cater to other people's tastes. Surely, if the story is interesting to you personally, you will do a better job of writing it. And furthermore... take me, for example. I have a needle kink, which, as you might imagine, I rarely see written. I wouldn't object if you decided to include that in your next story. I might even have a greater desire to read the story, if you posted up front that that was included. However, I sincerely doubt that it would make me like your story any better, because if you write about that kink, but write about it in the same way that you write everything else, it would again be not bad, but not particularly interesting either.
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