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sivullinen: Promises (Ron/Ginny, PG-13)

May 31, 2006 15:57

Title: Promises
Author: sivullinen
Rating: PG-13
Prompt Set: 50.1.
Prompt: #40, Promises
Word Count: 301
Summary: Boys make promises to Ginny.
Warnings: incest

( Promises )

ginny/ron 50.1 (sivullinen)

Comments 22

aerama May 31 2006, 13:23:34 UTC

Wow. That thread of desperation running through the story is so powerful. It's all mixed up with longing, angst, and the overwhelming need to engulf what one yearns for. I like the progression and the pacing, plus the added jolt at the end when you realize that Ron must've been feeling the same thing all this time (if one substitutes in Lav & Hermione).
And also the view she had of Harry; Harry is Love's Young Dream on his own so therefore she MUST be happy with him.
It says something right there that she had the strength to go in another direction.

sivullinen May 31 2006, 15:27:10 UTC

Oh, you've no idea how much I love comments like that :D

So, thanks! *hugs*

wilshirist May 31 2006, 13:37:51 UTC

I'm shaking.

sivullinen May 31 2006, 15:27:32 UTC

...good or bad?

wilshirist May 31 2006, 17:10:59 UTC

Def good. Amazing. *speechless* The feeling of fulfilment and everything besides the het (H/G) ... wow.

mara_202 May 31 2006, 13:41:11 UTC

Wow. Just wow. Brilliant use of the prompt! I really like the way the story progresses. The ending is great!

sivullinen May 31 2006, 15:30:33 UTC

Thanks so much! *huggles*

sc_atharsis May 31 2006, 14:54:01 UTC

Wow! There's actually action! xD I didn't completely understand what you were going for but the desperation was expressed nicely and I really like the Harry/Ginny part for the 'This must be happily ever after'

sivullinen May 31 2006, 15:34:46 UTC

I wanted to write more action, but I couldn't. I should practice by trying to write some smut. Hmm, there's that prompt "Naked"... But really, it's terribly difficult.

Thanks :) And I love you so much for saying stuff like "I didn't understand what you were going for", because I promise, I'll try to learn about that and try to be more clear :)

sc_atharsis May 31 2006, 15:41:08 UTC

I don't think I'd want to see too much action. Or at least it's nice to see you start out with none and then putting in a little more action and maybe someday write smut. The build-up is good for the audience (read: me). Ron and Ginny didn't have smeckz after 500 words, either.

Yeah, it's very hard to give, but I know that artists *need* and *want* critique. It's just, delicate, you know?

acidpop25 May 31 2006, 20:17:26 UTC

Ooh, very nice. I love the style, the series of thematically related vignettes- I think it's such a good way to draw parallels and contrasts between characters and events. Lovely work. And the R/G was wonderful, real and raw.

sivullinen June 1 2006, 15:00:52 UTC

Thanks! I love "theme and variations" style of fics a lot, too :)