Mm, it's cute, although Sora is less in character than Riku (with drunkenness, however, allowances can be made). I really liked the intro paragraph.
Only one real criticism: "brunette" means female with brown hair. I kept thinking of Sora as being even more feminine than I usually think when you used that word.
I know this is very OCD of me, but I looked in a few dictionaries and the definition sometimes includes the feminine qualifier, sometimes does not.
Wiktionary: brunette (not comparable) 1. Of a woman or girl, having dark brown hair.
Sleepycreek.net: brunette noun 1. A woman or girl with brown or dark hair. adj 1. Said of hair colour: brown, usually dark brown. Compare blonde.
Bartleby.com: SYLLABICATION: bru�nette PRONUNCIATION: br-nt ADJECTIVE: Having dark or brown hair. NOUN: A girl or woman with dark or brown hair.
Merriam-Webster Main Entry: 1bru�net Variant(s): or bru�nette /br�-'net/ Function: noun : a person having brown or black hair and often a relatively dark complexion -- spelled brunet when used of a boy or man and usually brunette when used of a girl or woman
So we're both right in a way. From what I can ascertain, "brunette" as an adjective can refer to men or women, but "brunette" as a noun refers to a female.
I'm a grammar nazi, sorry ;) But, yay, I learned something new today ^_^
Well, um... I guess I'm flattered that you cared enough about something in my fic to look all that up? Hehehe. Every other thing I've ever read used brunette as a something of a gender neutral sort of word, but now that I know that, I can go back and change it. Thanks!
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Only one real criticism: "brunette" means female with brown hair. I kept thinking of Sora as being even more feminine than I usually think when you used that word.
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I looked it up cuz I was curious(not cuz i'm trying to be snarky) and as an adjective it just means "having dark or brown hair."
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Wiktionary: brunette (not comparable)
1. Of a woman or girl, having dark brown hair.
Sleepycreek.net: brunette
noun
1. A woman or girl with brown or dark hair.
adj
1. Said of hair colour: brown, usually dark brown. Compare blonde.
Bartleby.com:
SYLLABICATION: bru�nette
PRONUNCIATION: br-nt
ADJECTIVE: Having dark or brown hair.
NOUN: A girl or woman with dark or brown hair.
Merriam-Webster Main Entry: 1bru�net
Variant(s): or bru�nette /br�-'net/
Function: noun
: a person having brown or black hair and often a relatively dark complexion -- spelled brunet when used of a boy or man and usually brunette when used of a girl or woman
So we're both right in a way. From what I can ascertain, "brunette" as an adjective can refer to men or women, but "brunette" as a noun refers to a female.
I'm a grammar nazi, sorry ;)
But, yay, I learned something new today ^_^
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Well, um... I guess I'm flattered that you cared enough about something in my fic to look all that up?
Hehehe.
Every other thing I've ever read used brunette as a something of a gender neutral sort of word, but now that I know that, I can go back and change it.
Thanks!
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